
Godzilla316
MemberAnguirusAug-18-2014 12:37 PM
From now on my fan fic will be called... Zilla Jr: Earth's Second Defender
Also this takes place in California
This Chapter is most just Pete and Gwen meeting for the first time and talking, enjoy :)
-Dammit, not again- says John
-Pete, Pete wake up- screams John
Pete wakes up in a shock
-What happened?- asks Peter
-You passed out again-says John
-Dang man, you should stop doing that sh*t, if scares the hell out of us- says Terry
-Take the rest of the night off- says Mason
-I could give you lift- says Vincent
-I'll find my own way home- says Peter
Peter walks out of the club, while everyone seemingly forgets about him collapsing and continues dancing.
-I shoulda accepted his offer, where am I gonna find a cab?- thinks Peter to himself
-Hey, you ok?- says a blonde lady walking up to him, she was young, and really beautiful- Name is Gwen, I know First Aid so I would've helped until that guy came over- says Gwen
-Yeah im fine, he's my older brother- says Pete
-Do you need anything?- sags Gwen
-Sorry, I dont want to bother you at this time of the nig..- Pete is cut off
-No, No, its fine, my friends say im too kind because I usually help strangers without second thoughts, they say someone will mug me one day but I dont care- says Gwen
-No need to worry about me, Second Lieutenant Peter Ryans, that was my squad back there, im on leave- says Pete
-Ok so I guess im safe- says Gwen
-I just need a lift back to my hotel, no cabs around at this time- Pete
-Sure, follow me- says Gwen
(He follows her to her car)
-Did you really believe me when I said im in the army?- says Pete
-I can tell when people are lying-
(They get inside the car, with Pete sitting next to the drivers)
-How old are you?- asks Pete
-23, im studying nuclear physics-
-Im 25, my dad always wanted my brother and I to join the army. He died in 1999 years ago. He was killed by the Janjira Power Plant failure. He was off duty and went to Japan with my mom. He was passing by the plant to see his old friend when the place collapsed and he got trapped under rubble-
-Sorry no its fine-
[I know he didnt say which hotel, and I didnt research hotels in California but just use your imagination to which he said where it is]
-We're here- says Gwen
-Thanks for the lift- says Pete
(As Peters about to get off)
-Hey Gwen, would you um... like to....-
-...Go on a date- she finishes his sentence-Sure. Anytime. Here is my number [I dont know how USA numbers are formatted so use your imagination]
-Thanks- says Pete
Dont think im crazy for this lovy dovy scene but.. my sister says she loved how Gareth added human drama, so she was inspired and since I aint the romantic scene type guy, she said she would do most of the scenes. I help her with what they sorta say like I told her to write about how his father died in the Janjira failure. I also told her to write the "I dont know about the number formatting" stuff, in South Africa its like this: 079 654 3846 ( I dont think this is a real number, I just made it up so you get the idea of how its set up). Also to explain why Zilla Jr goes after Amblygon instead of Godzilla going after it. After Amblygon is going put to get revenge for his lost eye. He encounters Zilla Jr's mate, which is another Zilla Jr but a female. I will have a concept ready soon. Anyway, now much more aggresive he attacks Zilla Jrs mate and destroys 4 of her eggs that she layed (she layed 5) and she loses the fight. Zilla Jr finds her bruised but alive but doesnt find Amblygon. So he goes in search for him to avenge his unborn offspring and his injured mate.
Also for the Zilla Jr design vote.... Design 2 wins

GG
MemberGiganAug-18-2014 2:08 PMOverall good chapter. Lovey dovey stuff i give a pass cause its kind of rare on forums xD!
However i do recommend changing the title from Zilla: earths second defender to Zilla Jr: earths second defender! Cause he isnt Zilla.
Ambylgon is a cool villain i like him. I have a cool idea that you should add. At the end of this in the final battle with Ambylgon, there isnt any reason why Godzilla can appear! Have it that Jr is being slaughtered by ambylgon and right before he is about to be killed Godzillas shadow arrives and kills ambylgon by stabbing his hand through his abdomen!
Good grief.

Kumonga65
MemberMothra LarvaeAug-18-2014 8:28 PMI really liked this chapter, can't wait for the next one.

Godzilla316
MemberAnguirusAug-18-2014 11:25 PM@GorillaGodzilla77897
Thanks. I will try to incorporate that into my final battle